Wow
Hey,
The mix and the quality aren't that great, but really... you've definitly showed your ideas! And they are great! Good and original riffs.. dude, you need better stuff to record! Just like me, I've got so many ideas, but no guitar skills at all, so I use synthesizer guitars, which just kill all the feeling in my songs. But yeah, as long as I can show my ideas to the world I'm okay with that. And the same for you I guess. Anyway: amazing song! In my opionion, a breakdown towards the end would do no harm ;)
~BStudios